All errata come from the first 'printing' .pdf of
Field Report: Periphery, as downloaded 29/07/11. All quotes taken directly from text, with the problem in
bold text. Problems and suggested fixes follow the quotes.
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The Canopians’ lost their beloved Magestrix and a great deal of their military elite when Crimson was firebombed.
(Superfluous apostrophe.)
Suggested correction:
The Canopians lost their beloved Magestrix and a great deal of their military elite when Crimson was firebombed.
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Primarily, President Carver Trondel and Force Commander Dirk McEvans believe that the Magistracy will be too distracted with its own rebuilding, and the Concordat too consumed by their war against the Federated Suns to pose any immediate threat to the Reaches.
(Missing comma; each example (Magistracy and Concordat) is its own break in the 'to' statement.)
Suggested correction:
... Dirk McEvans believe that the Magistracy will be too distracted with its own rebuilding, and the Concordat too consumed by their war against the Federated Suns, to pose any immediate threat to the Reaches.
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So, while the Concordat tries to maintain a façade of strength to ensure its populace, the Protectorate is content to consolidate its own power
and security, while both state continue to vie for the loyalty of as many of the neutral worlds between them as possible.
(Should be plural - 'both states'.)
Suggested correction:
... while both states continue to vie for the loyalty of as many of the neutral worlds between them as possible.
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This puts the realm on shaky ground, especially as the insurgents in the restive Lothian District have radically increased in recent months.
(Fragment/missing term.)
Suggested corrections:
This puts the realm on shaky ground, especially as the insurgents in the restive Lothian District have radically increased their activities in recent months.
OR
This puts the realm on shaky ground, especially as insurgent activity in the restive Lothian District has radically escalated in recent months.
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Lost was the Canopian Institute of War and most of the Magistracy Armed Forces’ central command structure.
(The 'and' means that this should be the plural form, 'were'; alternately, turn the later statement into and inclusive.)
Suggested correction:
Lost were the Canopian Institute of War and most of the Magistracy Armed Forces’ central command structure.
OR
Lost was the Canopian Institute of War, as well as most of the Magistracy Armed Forces’ central command structure.
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In the nuclear attack on their Alphard, the Hegemony lost its one major military academy, the Collegium Bellorum Imperium.
(Either the word 'their' is superfluous word, or the world 'capital' needs to be inserted.)
Suggested correction:
In the nuclear attack on Alphard, the Hegemony lost its one major military academy, the Collegium Bellorum Imperium.
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Even worse, this plan has only been partially carried out, as increased fighting in Lothian District prevents proper reallocation of resources.
(Missing word, 'the'.)
Suggested correction:
Even worse, this plan has only been partially carried out, as increased fighting in the Lothian District prevents proper reallocation of resources.
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That its cadets lack access to the advanced training simulators and other modern amenities found elsewhere in the Suns, Filtvelt’s trainees receive more hands-on time with actual equipment.
(Should be 'though'.)
Suggested correction:
Though its cadets lack access to the advanced training simulators ...
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Some intelligence suggests that new combat vehicles are being made domestically, if very slowly, at one of these adapted factories, while a fairly new upstart company, Coalition Armory Inc., has been supplying RetroTech ’Mechs as a supplement since 3076.
(Should be 'startup'? 'Upstart' implies an ambitious and somewhat-resented entity; 'startup' is the business term for a company that just opened its doors and is emotionally neutral.)
Suggested correction:
.. while a fairly new startup company, Coalition Armory Inc., has been supplying RetroTech ’Mechs as a supplement since 3076.
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The Taurians heavy losses against the FedSuns will be harder to replace with so much of their industry in ruins.
(Missing apostrophe - should be a possessive form.)
Suggested correction:
The Taurians’ heavy losses against the FedSuns ...
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The Magistracy Armed Forces (MAF) has emerged from the Jihad as the premier military force in the Periphery, ...
(Should be 'have', as 'Forces' is a plural.)
Suggested correction:
The Magistracy Armed Forces (MAF) have emerged from the Jihad ...
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... under cover of an HPG blackout, but not without facing a strong guerilla resistance led by Senior general Hadji Doru.
(Improper capitalisation - Doru's rank/title should be 'Senior General'.)
Suggested correction:
... but not without facing a strong guerilla resistance led by Senior General Hadji Doru.
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Unfortunately, the rate of volunteer recruitment has yet to match their manpower needs at present, so until the Reaches manage to train enough crews to operate and maintain these vehicular forces, these defenses will amount to little more than a paper tiger.
(Should be 'manages' - the term 'Fronc Reaches' is consistently treated as referring to a singular entity elsewhere throughout the product.)
Suggested correction:
... so until the Reaches manages to train enough crews to operate and maintain these vehicular forces, ...
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With disgust at the actions of the Taurian forces against their FedSuns enemies (for whom no love is lost with the Protectorate forces), a resolve to defend the Protectorate from forceful reintegration by the Concordat has solidified, reflected by increased loyalty to President Martens-Calderon and his fledgling government.
(Awkward structure/word-order/missing word(s).)
Suggested correction:
Disgust at the actions of the Taurian forces against their FedSuns enemies (for whom no love is lost with the Protectorate forces) has solidified a resolve to defend the Protectorate from forceful reintegration by the Concordat, which is reflected by increased loyalty to President Martens-Calderon and his fledgling government.
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The capital city of Nova Roma, and a huge swath of surrounding territory became a charnel house.
(Superfluous comma.)
Suggested correction:
The capital city of Nova Roma and a huge swath of surrounding territory became a charnel house.
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That the Caesar keeps his troops from consolidating any resentful feelings by prosecuting both active defense and invasion of new worlds to expand the realm (thus busying them with new populations to subjugate), the legion commanders have no time to incite rebellions from within the ranks.
(The whole sentence's structure is awkward and a little difficult to parse - leading with a qualifier like 'that' suggests the actual force of a statement is later in the sentence, but it never comes.)
Suggested correction:
The Caesar keeps his troops from consolidating any resentful feelings by prosecuting both active defense and invasion of new worlds to expand the realm, thus busying them with new populations to subjugate and leaving the legion commanders no time to incite rebellions from within the ranks.
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The Hanseatic Security Force (HSF) is boasts impressive strength, considering the small size of their realm and its distance from the Inner Sphere.
(Superfluous word.)
Suggested correction:
The Hanseatic Security Force (HSF) boasts impressive strength, considering the small size of their realm and its distance from the Inner Sphere.
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The HSF’s effort to drive the Diamond Sharks out of the Chainlaine Isles was also an unmitigated disaster, ...
(The p.5 mis-spelling of 'Chainelane Isles'
noted by Neufeld is repeated.)
Suggested correction:
The HSF’s effort to drive the Diamond Sharks out of the Chainelaine Isles was also an unmitigated disaster, ...
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The Umayyad Corps, though higher in recruiting numbers, lacks the materiel to equip all of its commands with ’Mechs, much less warriors trained well enough to use them effectively. All three Corps have thus been engaged in raiding the Hanseatic League both for on-the-job training and to capture as much salvage as possible.
(Number agreement - there are three Corps, so those first two highlighted words should be 'lack' and 'their'.)
Suggested correction:
The Umayyad Corps, though higher in recruiting numbers, lack the materiel to equip all of their commands with ’Mechs, much less warriors trained well enough to use them effectively.
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The damage sustained by RDFs 1 and 3 in their abortive attack on the Chainlaine Isles has humbled them, and they are now focused on rebuilding their shattered commands.
(The p.5 mis-spelling of 'Chainelane Isles'
noted by Neufeld is repeated.)
Suggested correction:
The damage sustained by RDFs 1 and 3 in their abortive attack on the Chainelaine Isles has humbled them, ...
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Their most prominent mercs under Canopian contract include Harcourt’s Destructors, Ramilie’s Raiders, and Markson’s Marauders.
(Should be 'the'.)
Suggested correction:
The most prominent mercs under Canopian contract include Harcourt’s Destructors, Ramilie’s Raiders, and Markson’s Marauders.
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Though Collection Militia they helped raise and train now outnumbers them, but the Aces remain far better skilled and equipped than the militia.
(Missing word, 'the'; superfluous word.)
Suggested correction:
Though the Collection Militia they helped raise and train now outnumbers them, the Aces remain far better skilled and equipped than the militia.
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((This 'issue' is possibly better suited to 'Ask the Writers'.))
On p.22, "Filtvelt Coalition Region" map: a world in the Tortuga Dominions, just Rimwards of Tortuga Prime itself, is labeled as 'New Hati'.
Periphery 1e carries this planet as 'New Haiti', though more recent references concur with the FR:P spelling. Given the historical precedent/parallel involved, which is correct?
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And that's all I can find, for now. :p
