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Easy

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Cleanup
« on: 06 March 2017, 18:05:47 »
cleanup
« Last Edit: 28 May 2019, 23:12:26 by Easy »
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snakespinner

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Re: Halley's Comet
« Reply #1 on: 06 March 2017, 23:31:53 »
Excellent start to a story.
A few spelling and grammar errors but all minor and do not detract from the story. O0
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Grognard

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Re: Halley's Comet
« Reply #2 on: 07 March 2017, 01:03:04 »
good writing. good story. good action.
minor quibbles on spelling and grammar.

++keep it coming++
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Easy

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Re: Halley's Comet
« Reply #3 on: 07 March 2017, 15:57:29 »
cleanup
« Last Edit: 28 May 2019, 23:14:32 by Easy »
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Easy

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Re: Halley's Comet
« Reply #4 on: 09 March 2017, 19:46:45 »
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« Last Edit: 28 May 2019, 23:13:41 by Easy »
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Dave Talley

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Re: Halley's Comet
« Reply #5 on: 10 March 2017, 19:03:22 »
damned nice start
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Daryk

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Re: Halley's Comet
« Reply #6 on: 10 March 2017, 19:54:17 »
Concur with all the other comments so far: Excellent story, nice writing, just needs a copy edit or two.  I look forward to more! O0
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marauder648

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Re: Halley's Comet
« Reply #7 on: 11 March 2017, 02:53:45 »
Damn nice story and great writing :) Can't wait for more :)
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