open beta PDF IO -- Creating a Force chapter
first pass copy edit for grammar and internal consistency.
1. On page 1, Stage 3, Step 1 "Procure Equipment and Hire Personnel" is not consistent with page 4 title "Buy the Stuff".
2. On page 1, Stage 3, Step 4 "Post Creation Procedures" is not consistent with page 8 title "Leftover Funds".
3. On page 1, Stage 4 title "Determine Operating Costs" is not consistent with page 11 title "Determine Operating Expenses".
4. On page 1, Stage 4, Step 1 "TO&E Completion" is not consistent with page 11 title "Complete the TO&E".
5. On page 1, Stage 4, Step 2 "Determine Peacetime Costs" is not consistent with page 14 title "Calculate Peacetime Costs".
6. On page 2, second paragraph, last sentence: "select their era from the Era Table below". Is the the "Force Creation Era Table" that the mercenary forces use? or is it a missing table?
7. On page 3, Budget Modification Table: the ERA and Faction title blocks are reversed.
8. On page 3, note at the bottom of the left column appears no longer correct.
9. On page 8, step 3, second paragraph, second sentence: "thus has leftover funds" should be "thus has to have leftover funds'.
10. On page 9, in Arnold's calculation, second paragraph, second sentence: "each 'Mechand" should be "each 'Mech and ".
11. On page 11, Ammunition, fourth sentence: "peacetime assumption is one-quarter .... divide by ....2". "2" should be "4", based on the example.
12. On page 12, example, first sentence: 'calculating salaries" should be "calculating expenses", since the salaries are the easiest, and last, part.
That's all for now.