I am not a fan of the miniature, but I really like what you have done with it. Nice work :) The subtle glow effect on the weapons is a nice touch and one of those small details which really bring a miniature to life.
My only suggestion would be to go for a lighter grey near the nose. That is probably just my interpretation of the Shadow Division theme, but I think the grey is too dark, especially with the nose itself (last panel, or first depending on your viewpoint) being even darker than those around the cockpit.