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ShroudedSciuridae

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #30 on: 15 July 2022, 05:52:10 »
Land of Dreams, Chapter 13

“And the Brotherhood of Donegal has complete control of the massive cache-fortress of the Black Brian,

Issue: This nickname was earned for the carbon scorching it received during the Exodus Civil War, it's unlikely this would be known to the Clans. Operation Klondike p. 86 (right column, 2nd full paragraph)

Correction: Change "Black Brian" to "San Biagio Brian Cache" or "Brian Cache Dag-92-906." Chapter 18 next discusses the Black Brian, adding a small line associating the local appellation to the structure would fit neatly there.


Chapter 30: "Nicholas next highlighted a gray arrow on the map. “Khan Osis, your Jaguars will approach from the southeastern corner, to the take the business district.”

Correction: change to "to take the business district."
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ShroudedSciuridae

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #31 on: 23 July 2022, 14:57:56 »
A Question of Survival

Epigraph errors in chapters 5 (missing Rasalhague Dominion), 6 (missing Jade Falcon Occupation Zone), 12 (missing RD),  14 (2nd epigraph, missing Sudeten), 16 (missing RD), 18 (3rd epigraph, missing RD), 22 (3rd epigraph, missing Quarell)

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #32 on: 17 August 2022, 07:19:26 »
A Question of survival pg 15

“It had been destroyed twenty-five years earlier, burned to the ground, with nearly every inhabitant killed. Leveled by Khan Malvina Hazen after her reckless war against Khan Jana Pryde. A warning to those that supported the ex-Khan. She had used the WarShip Emerald Talon as her missile to level the city, and she had not missed.”

The battle on Sudeten occurred in 3136 which is 15 years before 3151 not 25.

 

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