I guess it's a side-effect and really lets you know you're doing a good job, if things get heated in the comments.
unfortunately, they can get a little, teensy bit TOO heated. I'm not sure if that's what happened today, or not, and we don't discuss certain real-world things here. Period.
so, we're going to call "can you tell me where we start over" as 'done' at the last scene, with Liz leaving Earth.
Because honestly, every time I edged over to do another post on that story, I got drawn into reading the discussion in the comments, and had to resist the urge to explain, mansplain, bloviate, and bellow in the comments myself.
not because anyone had it wrong, but because the different perspectives were so interesting to me, and the level of passion being demonstrated was fascinating.
I mean, we're not just talking about fiction here, we're talking about a piece of that most pathetic of the breed, Fan fiction.
and my work was hardly on the level of, say, Mike Stackpole or Loren Coleman. I got a ton of things wrong with the canon characters there-and will offer no apologies for doing so.
so the reactions, and the level of them, really knocked me on a back foot. I was just screwing around with ideas.
kinda made me really wonder if there's a roleplay there-maybe putting Elizabeth Ngo on trial, with a poll.
Not sure if I wanna do that yet, but some of those impassioned arguments (You know who you are) were really, really interesting.
Parts I'm relatively happy with, but could use more and better work include the early sections of that story. Henry's journey really needed more detailing, more fleshing out and more depth than I gave it, and he deserved more scenes later on.
I kind of bolluxed on the Liz/Nathan romance, it's because I suck at romance. I'd love to get more depth there too, but who wants to read a bodice-ripper on a PG-13 site? maybe something for Fanfiction.net there or something. dunno. don't want to go past titilating to downright creepy with that.
More on Pat Ngo's life and especially his early life? maybe. It's hard to find something interesting to do with the guy, since his life up to its end included romancing his childhood sweetheart, being a safe-space provider for his little sister, and being a generally stand-up guy who really didn't deserve what happened to him.
People I don't want to do much with, include Elizabeth's father. I just...dislike the guy. Really. He hid from his responsibilities in the military and ignored his wife's growing mental illness, even to the point of volunteering to go on a hardship tour to get out of the house when she was at her worst.
no matter what I do, I can't like him enough to make him a main focus character. I guess there is a brand of ****** I won't write sympathetically about, and that breed begins with moral cowardice.
of course, that might be me being a judgmental prick, too.
There were battle scenes I ought to have written better, more in-depth, with more narrative and storytelling and less making lists.
I'm not happy with how I handled the Hue Challenge this time, though it did give me the chance to put Lizzie in treatment for her disorder in a logical way.
incidentally, in THAT version, the treatment was full, complete, and successful.
and I gave a better reason for Stone's republic to have it in for Liz Ngo, but I could've (and should've) done a better job staging that up than I did.
and finally, we're back to the last few scenes in that story...
and the debate.
Here's MY position as the writer;
Elizabeth Ngo's action, the kinetics and her behaviour after? absolutely will be condemned by people, and it should be. the debate SHOULD happen in-universe and in-character. I even alluded to it in the scene with her flag captain Nicole Minh. What Liz did was absolutely horrible.
it was also technically legal, and there would be (IN SETTING) people justifying it, both on legal grounds, and on moral ones.
neither side is 100% wrong. that's 'gray' morality for you. A sparkling white chrome hero would never order, or execute, that fire mission.
not even against the most evil and demented of enemies.
Victor wouldn't do it, Kai wouldn't do it, Phelan wouldn't, those are your benchmarks for spotless heroes.
At the same hook, the worst villains in the setting wouldn't restrain it. The Master would've aimed it right at the Yellowstone Caldera and various dormant or semiactive volcanoes, fault lines, and other places where it would do the most damage, Max would watch such an act with GLEE, Malvina would be actively trying to maximize casualties and damage if she possibly could. Katherine would sigh faux regretfully, then demand answers why it's going to take a few weeks instead of being instantaneous. Nondi would drool in her cornflakes.
That's your opposite end spectrum, the characters that are for want of a better term, absolutely despicable villains by design.
Elizabeth's use of CROWBAR on Terra was absolutely on the dark side of the spectrum-but, she had practical immediate as well as long term reasons for doing it.
I think the problem Devlin really has, is that she did it to him, instead of his ordering it on someone else, because it's exactly the kind of th ing that the mind who came up with gray monday would do.
even with similar motives on the darker end of the scale.
There's a trope out there,
"Good is not nice". the corollary is that Nice doesn't indicate goodness.
Elizabeth Ngo is not, in any of her various versions, a nice person to be on the wrong side of.
does that make her a bad person? sometimes.
is she a good person? sometimes.
are her appearances meant to be a bit controversial?
Hells yes. The character started out back around 2000 as a deliberate attempt at a villain protagonist.
I've migrated her somewhat, but the essential nature of the character is a mix of willpower, ruthlessness and intelligence.
that last part being the hardest part to write, since my wits aren't really all that sharp, and one of the hardest things to write in ANY format is someone smarter than yourself.