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"On 5 July, General Nondi Steiner established her forward command post in Neucason’s government complex, a testament to her confidence in the operation’s achievements and future success. Indeed, she was so confident of planetary security that on 3 July she authorized the Third Lyran Guards’ redeployment from Vega to Port Moresby, where they could repair and rearm before a scheduled third-wave offensive against Buckminster. Likewise, she approved the withdrawal of the Caballeros to Marfik, from which they would take part in an ultimately abandoned liberation of Alphecca. Finally, on 11 June she reassigned Marshal Herbert Hobaugh to her command staff to help execute Wave Two and plan waves Three and Four.
"Hobaugh’s executive officer, James Seymour, was brevetted to command of the RCT pending confirmation of his promotion by the Archon."
Several issues with this.
Issue 1: There is no Port Moresby, but there is a Port Moseby
Correction 1: Change Port Moresby to Port Moseby
Issue 2: The entire paragraph was talking about July actions. I believe the Hobaugh promotion occurred on 11 July as 11 June was still mid-siege of Vega's capital. Additionally, Turning Points War of 3039: Vega p. 7 lists this change as occurring in July.
Correction 2: Change 11 June to 11 July
Issue 3: Hobaugh and Seymour are from the Third DAVION Guards, not the Third Lyran Guards (who already left Vega). Confirmation would come from the First Prince.
Correction 3: Change Archon to First Prince
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Also on Page 21
"Lyran armor moved to block the Legion’s landing but lacked the firepower or resilience"
Issue: The Third Lyran Guard departed a week prior. Page 7 TO&E shows the only remaining conventional armor belong to Snord's Irregulars and the Third Davion Guards. As the Irregulars try to relieve them it's unlikely these are Irregular armor elements. Rhonda's Irregulars p. 49 give this armor unit as the 72nd Skye Armor, but they were attached to the 4th Skye Rangers during Heany's 3028 assault on Marfik (Heir to the Dragon Ch. 24) so that is likely an old error as well and would be unlikely to be attached to the Third Lyran Guards much less the Third Davion Guards.
Correction: Replace "Lyran armor" with "Davion armor" or equivalent and add "to contest the determined DCMS force" to the end of this incomplete sentence.
