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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #30 on: 15 July 2022, 05:52:10 »
Land of Dreams, Chapter 13

“And the Brotherhood of Donegal has complete control of the massive cache-fortress of the Black Brian,

Issue: This nickname was earned for the carbon scorching it received during the Exodus Civil War, it's unlikely this would be known to the Clans. Operation Klondike p. 86 (right column, 2nd full paragraph)

Correction: Change "Black Brian" to "San Biagio Brian Cache" or "Brian Cache Dag-92-906." Chapter 18 next discusses the Black Brian, adding a small line associating the local appellation to the structure would fit neatly there.


Chapter 30: "Nicholas next highlighted a gray arrow on the map. “Khan Osis, your Jaguars will approach from the southeastern corner, to the take the business district.”

Correction: change to "to take the business district."
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #31 on: 23 July 2022, 14:57:56 »
A Question of Survival

Epigraph errors in chapters 5 (missing Rasalhague Dominion), 6 (missing Jade Falcon Occupation Zone), 12 (missing RD),  14 (2nd epigraph, missing Sudeten), 16 (missing RD), 18 (3rd epigraph, missing RD), 22 (3rd epigraph, missing Quarell)
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #32 on: 17 August 2022, 07:19:26 »
A Question of survival pg 15

“It had been destroyed twenty-five years earlier, burned to the ground, with nearly every inhabitant killed. Leveled by Khan Malvina Hazen after her reckless war against Khan Jana Pryde. A warning to those that supported the ex-Khan. She had used the WarShip Emerald Talon as her missile to level the city, and she had not missed.”

The battle on Sudeten occurred in 3136 which is 15 years before 3151 not 25.

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #33 on: 26 October 2022, 20:21:40 »
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"One pair of lightning strikes found the lightly-armored torso of the left Sentinel, burying themselves deeply in the Defiance-built ’Mechs’s heart."
Issue: As of 2765 the BattleMech factory on Hesperus was Witten Industries, not Defiance Industries. Field Report: 2765 LCAF, p. 12
Correction: Replace with "Witten-built"
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #34 on: 08 November 2022, 11:29:29 »
Fox Tales page 154:

"Katie'd had to mediate between them for the entirety of 3050."  Should be 3150.
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #35 on: 31 December 2022, 10:58:31 »
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #36 on: 01 January 2023, 16:01:55 »
The Damocles Sanction

Page 64:

Issue: The date is listed as June 12, 3152.  Should be June 12, 3151 to match the rest of the story.
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #37 on: 02 January 2023, 08:34:33 »
The Damocles Sanction

page 247 (chapter 20)

Issue: the Taurian ambassador's height is described as "imposing" to the Davion envoys, but he's listed as only being 1.6 meters tall

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #38 on: 02 January 2023, 18:33:39 »
The Damocles Sanction

Page 306 chapter 26

 "Justin remained stock still,..."

Should be Julian, as Justin is not in the room.

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #39 on: 05 January 2023, 07:46:14 »
The Anvil, ch. 3

"Star Captain Noonan Binetti, take the Beak Binary and execute the orders you have."
Issue: Later in chapter referred to as Beak Trinary, with all Stars being named.
Correction: Replace with Beak Trinary

The Anvil, ch. 3
"deploy the explosive charge in the hands of his Griffon IIC."
Correction: Replace with Griffin IIC


The Anvil, ch. 5

"7 MARCH 3148...They had landed two days ago"
Issue: Shattered Fortress p. 27 says 27 February. This is likely correct as they departed Vorzel on 18 Feb (ch. 4), spent ~7 days charging at Tsinan (176 hours=7.3 days per "not considered canon" Tamar Rising), then a 2 day burn from pirate point to landfall.
Correction: Change date to 1 March (27 Feb+2 days), doesn't conflict with anything else I can see in The Anvil or Shattered Fortress.  The next hard time is 11 March in both sources (SF p. 27 & TA ch. 6) though The Anvil does reference 9 March in the first line, "The city of Lietnerton had changed hands three times in two days." If sitting around an extra week with nothing to show for it seems anti-thematic, adjust the number of times and days Lietnerton was fought over. Chistu evacuated the civilians on Day 1 and is under orders to level the place anyway so I doubt she cares if the Lyrans unwittingly help her raze the city with seesaw battles.

The Anvil, ch. 10
"This is Star Colonel Yaroslav of the Hazen Bloodline"
Issue: Era Report: 3145 p. 65 identifies him as Buhallin Bloodhouse.
Correction: Update whichever source is in error.
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #40 on: 01 February 2023, 16:18:42 »
Lethal Lessons, chapter 8

Page 91

"the Dragoons where on a schedule they had to follow..."

Change to:

"the Dragoons were on a schedule they had to follow..."
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #41 on: 21 March 2023, 22:52:41 »
In Perceptions of Victory, Bonnie Reid is called a Major on pages 6 and 17. But Captain Casey calls her "Colonel" three times on page 17.

Solution: make rank consistent.


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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #42 on: 25 April 2023, 15:56:25 »
Land of Dreams.  Page 195.

There is no era logo or spacing at the top of the page as is standard for a new chapter, just Chapter 27 in the larger typeface and bold at the very top of the page. As there is enough empty space at the bottom of the last page of the chapter, it shouldn't change the layout of the book to insert the Clan Homeworlds era logo at the top of the page, spaced correctly.
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #43 on: 13 May 2023, 05:24:12 »
TITLE: Hour of the Wolf
LOCATION: Chapter 14

PROBLEM: Malcolm Vickers is referred to as a Star Colonel, despite being a Galaxy Commander in Field Manual: 3145, and still clearly being in command of Iota Galaxy in HotW (i.e. as he is also referred to by the callsign Iota Prime).

FIX: Replace "Star Colonel Malcolm Vickers" with "Galaxy Commander Malcolm Vickers".

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #44 on: 22 June 2023, 15:17:55 »
Elements of Treason: Duty

Page 144: "Next to her, Nolan, wearing a dark blue suit, leaned on the railing and watch the crowd below"

Change "watch" to "watched"

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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #45 on: 22 August 2023, 13:07:26 »
In the prologue of the currently-provided version of the Freebirth ebook, Kerensky and Marthe each have instances of being misspelled as Keren-sky and Marine respectively.
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #46 on: 07 December 2023, 07:30:51 »
Finding Jardine, Ch 2

"The Mk. 30 BlackWasps were, by comparison, the Mk. 39’s smaller, slower and dumber cousins. That fact did make them easier to deal with, but each Mk. 39 still possessed nearly double the Magellan’s thrust potential at full burn and carried a pair of extended-range lasers that offered a far greater reach and punch than the shuttle’s array of Martell mediums."
Issue: The second 39 should be a 30 as it's describing the capabilities of the craft they're engaged with. The statistics are for the 30 and remain correct.
Correction: Change to "but each Mk. 30 still possessed"
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #47 on: 01 January 2024, 12:58:48 »
Between Golden Rule (2018) and Eyestorm (2018), Colby's Commandos switched from having one Commando and two Locusts to three Commandos in a span of three days with no explanation.

Golden Rule (5 April 2990):
p. 10, eighth paragraph, states, "...First Lance, with Hauptman's Shadow Hawk, Zeller's and Hernandez's Locusts, and Colby's 6M Wolverine."
p. 18, eighth paragraph, states, "...harried from the rear by De Salva's Commando and Hernandez's and Zeller's much smaller Locusts."

Eyestorm (8 April 2990):
p. 8, fifth paragraph, confirms De Salva in a modified COM-1A Commando.
p. 10, third paragraph, confirms Zeller and Hernandez in First Lance.
p. 17, first paragraph, states, "The unit's three Commandos moved in closer now, all three laying down a steady fire from their Shannon Six-Shooter missile launchers."
p. 20, second paragraph, states that Zeller's Commando was lost.

The remainder of the BattleMech roster, save for Zeller's and Hernandez's, is confirmed throughout Eyestorm. I see no mention of the reason for Zeller and Hernandez switching from Locusts to Commandos, nor were any faced in battle for them to salvage. There is also no prior mention of the unit owning more than one Commando.

MechWarrior Destiny (2020), Dragon's Lair (12 April 2990):
p. 6, second column, first paragraph, states that Zeller was injured and his 'Mech was lost.
p. 6, second column, last paragraph, states, "...Hernandez and De Salva in their Commandos."
There are multiple mentions of Hernandez and De Salva piloting Commandos throughout the story.
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Re: BattleTech CGL-Era Fiction
« Reply #48 on: 24 May 2024, 19:00:03 »
Without Question page 24 final paragraph: "able that for now."  Based on context, should be "Table that for now."
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« Reply #49 on: 27 May 2024, 00:08:00 »
Without Question Page 120, Paragraph 2: "She blasted a Vulture and took potshots at a Stormcrow as explosions rocked the battle in the distance."  As the point-of-view is from a Clan character, "Mad Dog" should be used instead of "Vulture" for consistency.

Without Question Page 120, Paragraph 4: "When the smoke cleared and her vision was no longer obscured, she took another shot at the Vulture with everything she had.  Thanks to the combined fire from two other 'Mechs-or tanks masquerading as 'Mechs, Dawn couldn't tell- the Vulture fell forward into a lifeless heap of slag."  Again, mech should be identified as "Mad Dog" for consistency.
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