I just wanted to pop in and say that this is fantastic. Sure, it's a fanboy's wet dream about what the Federated Commonwealth COULD have been... but it's done with such flair, attention to detail, and lighthearted fun that I found myself stuck to my chair reading it for five fracking hours.
It's not perfect, of course. There are some noticeable recurring errors. Your use of punctuation and quotation marks are, at times, rather problematic; the period does not go after the quotation marks, for example. Also, you frequently use the word "unphased" but I'm pretty sure you mean "unfazed."
However as a fan-made work, such criticisms are, in the end, a lover's quarrel. Again, well done. Looking forward to more.
Uh... also, count me in as a member of the Katrina/Smith crowd.