We're told we're not supposed to read unpublished BattleTech fiction that's not contracted by Catalyst. But having said that, there are lots of groups that can help you get feedback. Depending on where you live, there are almost always local writing groups you can get critiqued by.
If you tell me what city you live in, I'd be happy to help find one for you.
In Utah, we're lucky we have the League of Utah Writers and it's a non-profit that connects writers together for exactly this stuff. But pretty much everywhere has one, in the US and abroad.