The minor fixes from the RS have been applied to the XTRO and I have created a PDF and a combined file for those that prefer that.
See opening post.
A few spelling and grammar errors I spotted in this file:
https://www.dropbox.com/s/r9y3l4d3cm549ku/Society%20XTRO.pdf?dl=0p3, 5th paragraph starting with "The revolt":
"our surviving
the fleet redirected"
should be:
"our
surviving fleet redirected"
p3, 6th paragraph starting with "The last":
"from finding out the true
extend of our"
should be:
"from finding out the true
extent of our"
p6, 1st paragraph:
"This required emptying out
Brain Caches"
should be:
"This required emptying out
Brian Caches"
p6, 2nd paragraph:
"quality part, the
loses among these"
should be:
"quality part, the
losses among these"
p7, middle column, 2nd paragraph:
"
as is a “Pretend Mech” in"
should be:
"
as it is a “Pretend Mech” in"
p13, "Notable Units":
"finished being
build when"
should be:
"finished being
built when"
p19, "Notable Units":
"done anything
of noteworthy"
should be either:
"done anything
noteworthy" or "done anything
of note"
p23, left column, 1st paragraph:
"hidden underwater
facilitates"
should be:
"hidden underwater
facilities"
p23, Notable Units:
"is also the last Whisperer to be
last configured"
should be:
"is also the last Whisperer to
be configured"
p35, left column, 1st paragraph:
"from start to finish,
an logistical nightmare for the Society"
should be:
"from start to finish,
a logistical nightmare for the Society"
p35, "Capabilities", 1st paragraph:
"a Heavy
Calvary unit"
should be:
"a Heavy
Cavalry unit"
p35, "Capabilities", 2nd paragraph:
"combination of
calvary movement, effective"
should be:
"combination of
cavalry movement, effective"
p35, middle column, 1st paragraph:
"allow the use of
360 rated XL engines"
recommend as
"allow use of
the 360-rated XL engines"
(had to read it twice to understand it did not mean there were three hundred and sixty engines available)
p40, Arospace, 1st paragraph:
"
had been"
should be:
"
has been"
('had been' sounds like the Aerospace component has been lost, 'has been' means that the part existed in the past and still does exist)
p43, Capabilities, 2nd 'paragraph':
second paragraph is not indented
p43, Capabilities, 4th paragraph:
"crews for
striping or repairing"
should be:
"crews for
stripping or repairing"
p45, Capabilities, 2nd 'paragraph':
second paragraph is not indented
p45, Capabilities, 3rd paragraph:
"and
an reinforced repair"
should be:
"and
a reinforced repair"
Depending on the secrecy available, I could see the Society working on a mutatype that might be politely called 'Sheeple'. This mutatype would be where the recipients at Fertility clinics get various upgrades/Traits that make them excellent long-lived Laborers and Technicians, but have cleverly selected negative Traits such as Combat Paralysis. So excellent non-combatants, but less likely to rebel. Those who do want to rebel (or are not part of the Fertility Clinic products) are carefully guided towards planetary militia so they can be used up.
