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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #60 on: 27 July 2019, 04:34:52 »


Excellent writing, absolutely superb stuff.
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #61 on: 28 July 2019, 19:09:16 »
Excellent writing, absolutely superb stuff.

Cheers mate. Screams 'First Draft' to me now, but it was fun to write at the time.

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EIGHTEEN: ORLOVA
Fort Romas, Nusakan
Terran Hegemony (Star League)
December 27, 2766


Orlova ran her hands through her hair, tugged down her uniform and brushed the shoulders and arms before the doors to the command center slid open. People wanted to see the top brass was in control, and she had to look the part.

Emergency alerts in the middle of the night be damned.

She strode into the center as if her heart was not pounding. “Sitrep. Talk to me, people: What’s happening?”

The center was almost crowded, for a change. The same alarm that had jolted her out of bed had roused a score of commtechs and other personnel, all clustered around terminals about the perimeter of the room, headsets jammed over their ears, whispering furiously into microphones.

Every monitor, Orlova saw with ice creeping in her veins, was utterly black and silent. The commtechs’ questions went unanswered.

The chief commtech looked up from his monitor, saluted, but then shrugged helplessly. “I don’t know, sir. We got a garbled message from Fort Verona, static audio, three seconds only, then the signal cut out and we can’t reestablish contact.”

“What about Fort Fornovo? Major General Sheridan?”

The commtech shook his head. “No response there either, sir. Can’t reach Camps Medici, Doria, Pavia or Savoy either. Ditto Holden and Jobs cities and the HPG stations, sir.”

The ice had worked its way up from her hands and toes, and was now squeezing her stomach and heart. “The spaceports? SDS command?”

Another shake of the head. He looked like he was trying very hard not to cry. “Gone dark, sir.”

“Unity,” she whispered, nearly dizzy, feeling the floor shift, and reached out to steady herself against the map table. She’d thought she had been prepared for the worst—how wrong, how very, very wrong she had been. “Unity.”

Everyone was watching her now. She took her hand from the map table and straightened. Tried to put some iron in her voice. “Check for equipment failures, keep trying to raise anyone we can. Get access to anything that’s going to give us eyes anywhere over those bases—weather satellites, mapping, traffic control, anything. In the meantime, we—”

One of the techs gave a choking, strangled cry. Orlova broke off, glaring furiously at the woman. The tech was holding her head in her hands, recoiling from her monitor, fingers forming a cage over her eyes.

“Oh, what is it now?” Orlova snapped. But even as she spoke, she saw what had happened. The tech had accessed the media broadcasters, both the public and private news. Most had gone dark too, or displayed the channel logo and a brief, looped message about ‘technical difficulties.’

But one had remained on the air—an entertainment channel, normally dedicated to VR games, the peccadillos of tri-D stars and sensationalized dramas based on the lives of famous ‘Mech jocks.

It wasn’t showing any of those now.

Overlooked perhaps because of its frivolous content, considered no threat to any attacker, they’d switched to a live broadcast. An androgynous reporter, incongruously dressed in shiny, reflective silver and glittering rhinestones, stood atop the roof of a high-rise tower, silhouetted against the sky.

Behind them, a black and orange mushroom cloud climbed into the stratosphere.

*  *  *

> What will do you?

“My duty, of course. What else can I do?”

> Ah, but what is your duty in this scenario? You are a soldier, not a politician. Surely it is not up to you to determine the legitimacy of the ruling government. Surrender is an option.

“Never,” Orlova said automatically, unthinkingly. “Besides, I don’t think the Rimjobs are going to give us that chance.”

Artillery shells were raining down on the ground, over two kilometers above her head. Down here, it was almost peaceful. Quiet.

> They have made an interesting opening move, I agree.

“I think ...” it was difficult to force the words out, as though speaking them would make them come true. “I think they’ve wiped everyone else out. We’re all that’s left.”

> On the plus side, your position is uncompromised. A defensive strategy may be sustainable until new pieces enter the game. Unfortunately, as long as your units remain trapped here, you hand the initiative completely to your adversary. They can pick the time and place of engagement, wear you down at their leisure, growing stronger while you grow only weaker.

“The gambit of yours. I did what you told me. Will it work?”

> The stratagem I suggested may prove effective, provided the Killer/Griefer tendency is ascendant. This is why the Explorer/Scientist poses such a threat. If your position has not been attacked yet, it suggests the latter is still in control.

“How can I change that?”

> Provoke a response. Do not play by the rules. Cheat.

Orlova nodded to herself. She did have one weapon in her arsenal that the Rim Worlds could not match. Perhaps a demonstration of her power could scare them into hasty overreaction.

> A fascinating endgame.

“It’s not a game.”

> Just as you say.

“Can we win?”

> Anything can happen in the game, Player.

She thought about destroying it. It wouldn’t take much—a few laser rounds through the servers to shut it down, maybe a few demolition charges to destroy any evidence. Among a conservative, even regressive intergalactic civilization that had largely turned its back on both technological and social advances, AIs were anathema, ranking right up there alongside nuclear weaponry and targeting civilian orbital habitats on any list of actions that were strictly taboo, verboten, outlawed, crimes against humanity. If the RWA found this one, she’d be handing them an enormous PR coup, perhaps enough to turn the other Council Lords against the Hegemony.

But she might need it, later. And she didn’t doubt the RWA was quite capable of manufacturing any justification they required.

When she had left, the system was left humming to itself.

> And if it doesn’t, then we will all meet the Player-God that much sooner. A pleasant thought.

> Until then
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #62 on: 29 July 2019, 19:05:32 »
NINETEEN: STRATOS
Hubris City, Nusakan
Terran Hegemony (Star League)
December 27, 2766


The three civilians were in various states of blurry sleepiness and disheveled half-dress. They’d rousted the Mayor from his mistress’s bed, abruptly escorted the Baroness from an opera performance and caught the business Chairman about seven glasses into a wine tasting.

The three had been dumped into large, overstuffed chairs in one of the drawing rooms in the Baroness’s city residence. It was a small oasis of wealth amid the squalor of the city, standing four stories high, with a rooftop garden and swimming pool, its own private docks, VTOL pad and fleet of hover vehicles.

Stratos did not hurry to meet her guests; she wanted to savor this moment, every last second of it. She’d read the message from Terra, and known even before finishing the first line what it meant: The death of Richard Cameron and his family, and the destruction of the SLDF. Revenge for an ancient humiliation. And more importantly, a chance for her to shine, to rise further ... or change sides, should Amaris’s plot be in danger of failing. That way was prepared as well: She could throw the SLDF Rajk and Curda, the sadist and the death cultist, and put all the blame on them. Either way, she came out on top.

She roamed the halls, shadowed by Curda and Rajk, admiring the artwork that decorated the hallways and rooms, the atmosphere of wealth and privilege, the aroma of aristocracy. She stopped before an ancient, beautifully-decorated china vase, closed her eyes and breathed deeply, and then pushed it off its pedestal. It struck the floor and shattered most satisfactorily. “Oops.” Humming to herself, Stratos made her way towards the drawing room.

The ceiling of the room was mostly glass, through which Stratos could see the three moons, all together in the sky now.

As befitted a noble who served two masters, there was a digital portrait of Richard Cameron on one wall, balanced by one of Robert Steiner, Archon of the Lyran Commonwealth on the other. To one side stood a sideboard made from some rare and dark wood that shone like onyx, on which sat a crystal sculpture in the shape of the lopsided Cameron star.

There was some huffy “What is the meaning” and “Demand an explanation” from the Baroness when Stratos walked in. She ignored the Baroness.

The Mayor was cowed, sheepish, staring at his feet, dressed only in pajama bottoms and a dressing gown. Ah, the ageing star, seeking to hold onto his glory days and convince himself of his virility by wrapping himself around an impressionable young woman.

The Chairman peered owlishly at her through an alcoholic fog, perhaps wondering if this was all some practical joke.

They were surrounded by Curda, Rajk and a pair of other Krypteia agents—officially the Hegemony Security Forces now—in black fatigues, combat boots, helmets and face masks.

Stratos held up two placating hands and the Baroness fell silent. “Please accept my apologies, good citizens, but there has been an urgent announcement from the Terran Hegemony government on Terra, and you had to be informed immediately.”

The three looked at each other. Stratos smiled at them, strolled over to the sideboard, and began to toy with the crystal sculpture of the Cameron star. “You see,” she ran a finger along the top edge, down the side and around the base, “I am delighted to announce that there have been some changes in the High Council.”

She gripped the base, picked up the sculpture, tossed it lightly a couple of times in her hand, getting a feel for the weight.

“What ‘changes’?” the Baroness demanded, sitting ramrod straight.

Stratos cocked her arm, made a half turn and whipped the statue into the portrait of Richard Cameron. The statue shattered in a rainbow shower of pieces, spiderwebbing the portrait screen, cracking it open, and causing the display to flicker, fizzle and then go suddenly blank.

“At the urging of his dearest and closest advisor, President Stefan Amaris, Richard Cameron has ... resigned his post as Director-General,” Stratos said, watching with satisfaction as shards of both the sculpture and portrait crackled and fell to the ground. “President Amaris will lead the interim government until new elections can be held. However, I am greatly saddened to say the Star League Defense Force has attempted to stage an illegal coup and overthrow the rightful government of the Hegemony. Accordingly, all units of the SLDF will be disarmed and confined to detention centers by garrison units of the Rim Worlds Army. Those that resist will be dealt with, and the leaders of this mutiny will face swift justice. Your cooperation is expected and you’ll need to publicly swear oaths of loyalty to the interim government—the text is already prepared.”

The Baroness was on her feet. “Outrageous. I am a citizen of the Lyran Commonwealth and demand you release me at once. You expect me to serve that fat, backwoods baboon? I’d rather die!”

Stratos nodded to Curda, who stood behind the Baroness’s chair. Curda stepped forward, drawing her laser pistol, pressed it against the back of the Baroness’s neck and fired. There was a bright flash of light as the beam punched through her skull, a fountain of red, and the old woman toppled slackly forward.

The Mayor and business Chairman stared at the body, face down on the carpet, already turning a dark burgundy. The chairman now seemed quite sober.

“After you swear the oaths, for your own safety gentlemen you will be confined here until the crisis passes,” Stratos told them. “We may need you to make public announcements from time to time. Remain calm, obey the authorities, that kind of thing. Unless either of you have any objections?”

The Chairman’s jowls quivered as he shook his head. The Mayor fiddled with the belt of his gown. “What—what about. What about the Fort?” he asked.

Stratos smiled. Already, RWA forces inside the other two Forts on the planet had opened them to assault. A pity they hadn’t been able to do the same to Fort Romas yet, but things might yet pan out. In any case Major Orlova would soon have to realize she faced an entire hostile planet, cut off by hundreds of light years from any kind of support. Even if the reservist’s information turned out to be false, Orlova’s situation was entirely hopeless, and any resistance would be futile.

“The SLDF has already made its choice,” said Stratos. “But who knows?” She shrugged, pointed down at the Baroness. “We may yet hope Major Orlova’s answer is more level-headed.”
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #63 on: 29 July 2019, 19:08:39 »
They didn’t have to wait long for Major Orlova’s response.

The first reports came from the police cruisers out in the bay. Radar pings. Something big, approaching fast. Hasty, nervous orders to halt, identify, turn around went unanswered. Images blurred as cameras swept over the waters and tried to focus. A bow wave rippled, like the nose of a giant orca or great white shark, as something massive moved just beneath the surface.

Searchlights blazed, slid across the waters and converged on the rushing wave front. Terrified policemen swung around pintle-mounted machineguns or shouldered short-range rocket launchers, aware of how small and pathetic their weapons felt.

“Fire!” captains shouted. “Fire, fire, fire!”

Machineguns hammered, chewed through belts holding hundreds of rounds, kicking up spouts of water all around the shape, glowing tracers and needle-noses bullets plunging down, and vanishing. And still the wave came on. Missile launchers boomed, their payloads taking to the air with screaming whooshes, leaving billowing trails of grey-white smoke as they hurled themselves across the sky, dove, and exploded in great gouts of shrapnel, fire and water spray.

The thing reacted. It surfaced. Reared up, above the waters.

It was a monster, glistening, eerie bone-white in the moonlight, over 12 meters tall, with a massive wedge-shaped body, raptor legs, and heavy, pincer-clawed hands.

The hands snapped open, revealing the cavernous mouths of two great cannon.

There was a moment of stillness. Waves stirred up from the earlier explosions slapped against the boats, rocking them from side to side. The police stopped firing, gazing open-mouthed at the apparition, craning their necks upward to take in its gargantuan side, its deadly lines, the cold cruelty that gleamed from every surface. Some prayed, some cried.

The BattleMech said nothing.

The cannons spoke. Twin supernovae of light blossomed, and the police boats vanished: exploded into pillars of flame or simply disintegrated, boats, crewmen, weapons, everything gone, reduced to millimeter shreds blown out into billowing clouds.

The monster waded forward, through the expanding rings of wreckage, into the city.

The police and paramilitary units, hastily-armed civilians pressed into service by the new government, turned and fled. Some tore off their new uniforms, scampering away in undershirts and briefs, others threw their weapons into the canals and sat with their hands raised.

The BattleMech ignored them, stalking along riverstreets, its shoulders sometimes brushing against buildings where the passage was too narrow, casually ripping away balconies, corners, whole walls, never slowing its stride.

It entered the central plaza-lagoon, marched to the center and halted, facing the police headquarters. The people inside rushed to the windows, gaped, then realized what was going to happen, and scrambled to get away, clawing and pushing past one another in a stampede for the exits. Windows on the opposite side were flung open, some leaping down to land on the concrete docks below. Others shoved through the exits and piled into boats moored about the building, often casting off while still half-full.

After precisely five minutes, the BattleMech opened fire.

It methodically walked its twin cannon across the building, from right to left, its shells punching groundcar-sized holes in the walls and columns, bringing the whole building crashing down in a volcano of concrete dust and debris. A laser lashed out from the main body of the machine, playing across the rubble, reducing it to molten, glowing slag.

(From her new headquarters in the Baroness’s residence, Stratos watched the video feed from cameras mounted atop the city council building, open-mouthed.)

A small flotilla of survivors bobbed in the disturbed waters, staring at the space the building had occupied mere seconds before. Nothing was left standing, no pillar or wall or even spar, only a semi-liquid, bubbling-hot molasses of melted plastic, concrete and glass.

The BattleMech tilted slightly towards the helpless refugee fleet.

There were no threats, no ultimatum. No communication of any kind.

The laser licked out, and began to methodically incinerate them. A three-second burst was often enough to destroy a couple of boats, more if they were clustered together. Four, five spurts of light, and a dozen little craft were blasted to pieces. Bodies writhed in the flames, and were burnt to ash.

As though satisfied, the BattleMech turned away, and marched back the way it had come, back towards the deep waters of the bay, brutally shouldering its way through more masonry and architecture as it went.

In the Baroness’s residence, Stratos ground her teeth together. “Get me Shenk,” she snapped.
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #64 on: 29 July 2019, 19:13:50 »
Score one for Orlava… if nothing else, she gave the Rimjobs a bad day there...

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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #65 on: 30 July 2019, 19:55:40 »
Score one for Orlova… if nothing else, she gave the Rimjobs a bad day there...
That part was kind of fun to write--it's the BattleMech's "Godzilla" moment, where the machine is described and behaves just like a kaiju.

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TWENTY: SHENK
South of Hubris City, Nusakan
Terran Hegemony (Star League)
December 28, 2766


He was a tank. A 35-ton Lightning hovertank, streaking across the waters of the Sea of Telesto, skipping across the wind-swept waves, salt-spray fanning all around him. He wished he could feel the wind racing by, feel the touch of the spray.

Shenk reached out a hand to catch the water and promptly banged it against a table, a painful reminder that whatever he was seeing, his body was still quite firmly back in the operations center.

While the news from Terra had filled Stratos with elation, Shenk had felt only dread. Operation Moked called for him to throw his regiment against Fort Romas and capture it. Gates to the other two Castles Brian had been opened from the inside, but thanks to Major Orlova’s intransigence, no such help had been forthcoming with Romas. He would instead have to rely on a head-on assault. Suicide.

Shenk had played for time, but after the demolition of the police headquarters, Stratos and the Krypteia had hammered on the RWA’s door, demanding immediate action and retaliation.

There was the intel the kid had provided, the postern gate in the fort, but something about that felt wrong to Shenk. The approach was too constricted, too easily defended, it was all too convenient.

He’d keep that idea in reserve, and trust his own instincts first. And who knew? It might be that not immediately stampeding for this supposed weak point could defuse any potential trap—by convincing Orlova he hadn’t taken the bait, all the better to surprise her when he struck at the hidden gate later. Better to keep one’s options open.

So for today, there were three strike teams. The hover armor battalion would sweep down on the Fort’s known exits, covered by the regiment’s organic artillery battery. Once the areas were secured, assault engineers would arrive by hover APC, blow open the doors, and then the heavy armor of the other two battalions would seize control of the Fort’s upper levels.

Shenk remained at the base. Like he’d said to Stratos, the Colonel’s place was at the center, not leading the charge. His head was strapped into a slightly heavy, boxy set of VR goggles, plugged into the headquarters’ main battle computer. He could look directly out through any of the sensor cameras mounted on his tanks, while a minimap kept track of the position of each unit and color-coded icons monitored their status.

Artillery shells smacked into the hills about the bay, tossing up showers of dirt and stone. The hills remained silent, and made no answer.

The Lightning hovertank Shenk was currently monitoring—the point vehicle in one of the companies—arrived at the target location, a shallow valley amid rolling, grassy hills. The gate was built into the side of one of the slopes. The Lightning and Zephyr hovertanks settled into a double-ringed circle, centered about the gate, the Lightnings facing inwards, towards the hidden gate, the Zephyrs outwards, towards the surrounding hills. They waited.

Marsh grass rippled and waved across the lonely hills. Zephyr tank turrets scanned back and forth restlessly. Found nothing.

The hover APCs carrying the assault engineers threaded through the ring of steel around the gate and slammed to a halt, disgorged their occupants, and then tore away again. The engineers crouch-ran to the gate, and waited.

“All units in position,” signaled the Major commanding the hover battalion. “Awaiting your signal.”

Shenk checked the map in the corner of his vision. There were three gates, each targeted by a company of armor. Two assaults were on time, the third delayed—the engineer APCs had gotten misrouted—but was now back on schedule.

Teams of men crouched by the three gates to the Fort, nervously fingering weapons, checking and rechecking their equipment, tightening straps, readying explosives. One or two prayed. Others exchanged wordless hand-clasps.

Shenk ordered the heavy armor battalions to advance, then switched back to the assault engineers. “Go,” he ordered.

The men stood.

As though on Shenk’s command, the ground rumbled. There was a thrumming, electrical whine all around. The combat engineers froze in confusion. The hilltops erupted all about the tanks. Squat pillars of steel burst upwards, shielding over guns and launchers slid open, and they began to fire.

Particle fire swept over the stationary tanks, ripping through them, igniting fireballs inside them, disintegrating the combat engineers in an instant. A black rain of point-blank missile fire started a firestorm that turned the air into an oven, baking crews alive. Shenk’s VR goggle camera view skewed to one side, disintegrated in a flare of cobalt-blue light, then went black.

One by one, the icons for all three assault companies flashed red.

In the headquarters, Shenk tore the goggles from his face in shock. “Sheeeyit,” he gasped.

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“Okay kid, we’ll try it your way.”

The kid startled awake, blinked, looked around, getting his bearings. Shenk saw it register: Prison cell, steel door, Colonel Shenk. “I have a way?” the kid croaked.

“Yup,” said Shenk, settling on the edge of the bed by Imre’s feet. “Your secret little code for your secret little entrance into Fort Romas. I’ve just had a very long and very intense discussion with Agent Stratos of the Krypteia—sorry, that’s Hegemony Security Forces to you—and with my own high command, and they are absolutely adamant that we try out the intel you gave us.”

Shenk didn’t tell the kid he’d argued for caution, and been rebuffed. The Krypteia, or more precisely Arianna Stratos, was still smarting, and still screaming for vengeance.

Meanwhile, the debacle with the hovertank assault had only served to further convince the high command that immediate action was necessary. Word was someone on Dieron had managed to screw up their assault and was now the recipient of a one-way ticket back to a shallow grave on Terra. The generals were anxious to avoid a similar fate. They’d agreed with Stratos, and given Shenk an ultimatum: Find a way into Fort Romas, or find himself in front of a firing squad.

Shenk had asked for reinforcements, and been brutally turned down. Sounded like the fight for the other two Castles wasn’t going quite as smoothly as they’d previously claimed—the current plan seemed to be to blast the defenders out with nuclear demolitions charges. Underground detonations were already shaking the streets in the planetary capital, Jobs City.

And to think, he’d imagined that joining the RWA would let him change it from the inside and transform it into something better. The first casualty of war was not truth, but rather, belief.

“Well,” the kid said dully, rolling over to face away from Shenk. “Congratulations, I guess.”

“Sour grapes are no excuse to be lazy, my boy. Better get dressed,” Shenk said, stood, collected the kid’s clothes from a clear, transparent plastic dresser and threw them on the bed.

“What’s the difference?” the kid rolled back to face Shenk again, looking puzzled. “It’s voice-only, not like they’re gonna see me.”

“Well, on the insistence of our good friend, Arianna Stratos and my own superiors, I am going to be riding in one of the lead tanks personally. And if I’m risking my neck on this, then so are you.

“Now get dressed, my boy. It’s gonna be chilly out, and I’d hate for you to catch a cold.”
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #66 on: 31 July 2019, 05:57:32 »
Wow that scene with the King Crab was amazing! As always the writing is 100% spot on brilliant. I fear the forts going to fall but how is another matter entirely. Excellent stuff and i'm hungry for more!
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #67 on: 31 July 2019, 14:54:58 »
I'm pretty sure the fort is going to be nuked... either by the Rimjobs, or by Orlava with the Rimjobs inside it...

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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #68 on: 31 July 2019, 19:11:38 »
Wow that scene with the King Crab was amazing! As always the writing is 100% spot on brilliant. I fear the forts going to fall but how is another matter entirely. Excellent stuff and i'm hungry for more!
How are you always so positive, my dude? Don't get me wrong, this stuff is like catnip for writers, I just wish I could stay so sunny. Thanks as always for the comment and support.

I'm pretty sure the fort is going to be nuked... either by the Rimjobs, or by Orlava with the Rimjobs inside it...
Don't worry, they all go riding off into the artificial sunset at the end. Or maybe not.

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TWENTY-ONE: ROSE
Hubris City, Nusakan
Terran Hegemony (Star League)
December 29, 2766


Once the news blackout had lifted, the media announcements were almost comical in their bland inability to provide any kind of real information. For all their attempts a reassuring gravitas, the media personalities had no idea what was going on: Director-General Richard Cameron had resigned, or no, he’d been removed for abuse of power, but wait, he’d disappeared, or maybe, he’d died in an accident. The SLDF had killed Cameron, or perhaps, they were trying to bring him back to power, or who knows, maybe Kerensky was staging a coup.

At first Rose had wondered why the Rim Worlders had allowed the broadcasters back on air, but now she saw: The hundred different reports and rumor and conjecture only added to the fog, not cleared it, and the only reactions the reports produced were confusion and apathy, not anger.

Someone had attacked the police headquarters and leveled it, that at least was clear. Fire had been seen in the sky, far over the horizon, towards Jobs City. What it all meant, nobody knew.

The people in her building watched columns of police vehicles pass on the riverstreets below and said nothing. When the police pounded on Rose’s door, they continued to say nothing. The tall one called Rajk had come to collect Rose from her home, shouldering the door wide the moment she opened it, grabbing her arm and hustling her rudely outside and down the stairs before shoving her onto an amphi.

“Stratos wants to see you,” he said.

The tide was out, so the amphi puttered down the muddy canyons between buildings, among the tree-trunk forest of concrete, wood and stone pillars holding up the city.

The wind, channeled between the buildings, whipped her hair and stung her face. She wiped tears from her eyes.

“What does Stratos want?” she tried asking Rajk over the wind.

“Your friend Imre.” Rajk nodded to the amphi driver.

“He’s not my friend,” Rose said, reflexively. “He killed Tristan.”

“That little freak?” Rajk laughed. “Oh come on, don’t tell me you fell for that one. That kid’s about as tough and dangerous as a used tissue. Him, kill anyone? Don’t make me laugh.”

“Then, who?” Rose remembered the things Imre had said, the things she had dismissed out of hand. “You?”

“Maybe I did, maybe I didn’t,” he said smugly. “What are you going to do about it, huh, Quisling?”

Rose stiffened, as though slapped. “Why would you say that?”

Rajk pointed over her shoulder. “Can you guess how many friends of mine died in there?” he asked. “All because of that little twerp and his subterranean troglodyte friends at the Fort.”

Rose looked. They were passing the burnt, blackened slag heap that had once been the police headquarters. Chunks of concrete, glass and police boats still littered the muddy ground of the plaza-lagoon.

“If you ask me,” said Rajk, “we should do the same to the whole damn city.”

Rose wasn’t listening. The only thing that registered was: Imre had been telling the truth. She’d turned him over to these people, she’d let them kill Hansen, for nothing. For a lie.

On the far side of the lagoon, the houses looked almost clean, and traffic was almost back to normal. A few of the more politically adroit families had taken down the Hegemony banner from flagpoles about their homes, and hoisted the Rim Worlds Republic shark instead.

The amphi halted by the Baroness’s residence.

It sat on its own, private island. There was a sprawling, walled garden all about the house, but most of the trees had been hastily hacked down and their stumps uprooted to make room for the sandbagged bowls of antiaircraft gun and missile emplacements.

Rose walked through in a daze, prodded by Rajk at her back.

Three ragged lines of people stood to one side of the garden, faces pale, resigned or disbelieving, some shocked, surrounded by black-clad men with guns. As Rose stumbled past, one of the lines was herded forward, around the corner and behind the wall. The sound of gunfire came soon after.

“Traitors,” Rajk said with satisfaction. “Your friend Imre will be joining them soon.”

“He’s not my friend,” she said automatically, but she could tell Rajk wasn’t listening.

They were met by Curda, the woman with black and white skin, at the entrance to the residence. Rajk seemed surprised to see her. “I can handle one civvie,” he said.

Curda’s expression did not change. “She told me to meet you,” she said. “You want to complain, take it up with her.” She turned and walked inside, evidently expecting them to follow.

“Weirdo voodoo freak,” Rajk muttered.

There was a broad, sweeping staircase inside, covered in plush red, velvety material that seemed to caress Rose’s feet as she walked inside. The material was filthy now, splattered with grease or oil and bearing the ground-in dirt of hundreds of booted feet carelessly tracking the mud of the riverstreets inside.

It must have been a beautiful place, once, before they transformed it into a fortress.

Rose could see through the doorways into several rooms off the main hall, and they had been converted into something military—a communications room, gun emplacements, storage rooms. Furniture had been piled up to one side, or simply smashed and the debris dumped outside.

Rajk and Curda led her up to the roof. There was a solarium there, mostly made of glass and steel, affording a view of the rooftop gardens and pool, and beyond, the sprawl of the city and the waters of the bay. Already Rose could see the ripples of the tide beginning to ebb.

“Wait here,” Rajk grunted. He went out, to the edge of the roof, where Stratos stood against a railing, looking North.

Rose stood, holding herself at the elbows, unsure what else to do. Curda looked at her, the way one might month-old food found at the back of a refrigerator, a mix of curiosity and mild distaste.

“The boy you helped us capture, Imre, will guide a regiment to attack the Fort today, in a few hours, and Stratos wants you as a hostage, in case Imre tries to double-cross them,” Curda said abruptly, in a matter-of-fact tone. “She’ll tell Rajk to kill you, after.”

Rose stared at her. Her eyes twitched to the exit. “What? Why?”

Curda shrugged and stretched, sinuously, both hands above her head. “It’s the way they think: People are pawns to be used and sacrificed. They don’t see that there are always levels above, we are always pawns in somebody’s else’s game.” She brought down her hands. “Company or country or cult or companions, we’re all servants in the end.”

Rose had started to shiver and was trying very hard not to cry. “Why are you telling me?”

Curda smiled, a little twitch to the side of her mouth, reached down to the pistol in her holster and drew it. “There are always levels above,” she repeated. She brought the pistol up to eye level, forcing Rose to look at it. “We’re all servants in the end.”

With a snap of the wrist, Curda twirled the pistol around and presented it towards Rose.

“Take it,” she said to Rose. “Take it. Rajk will be coming back soon. Take it, take it or die.”

Rose reached up, hands shaking, and gripped the gun in both hands. Curda released it with another smile, broad this time, filling her whole face. A look of utter satisfaction.

“I don’t understand,” Rose stammered. “You—you—“

Sevite,” said Curda, as if that explained everything. “We’re all servants, in the end. I am a loyal servant of the Ghede lwa, and they command this thing be done.” She turned, and walked towards the exit. “Good luck,” she said over her shoulder, slipped through the door, and closed it behind.

Rose heard the door to the roof slide open. “Where’s Curda?” asked Rajk, behind her.

Rose lowered the pistol, shielding it from Rajk’s view with her body. “She left. She said something about say-vee-tay.” She took a deep breath. What was left? Amends maybe, for Ames, and even for Imre. Maybe he had wronged her, and she had wronged him, maybe the whole thing was a mess and this was the best way it could end.

“Malking cuckoo. Come on,” Rajk said, and put a hand on her shoulder, starting to turn her around. “Stratos is waiting.”

Rose let herself be turned. Saw the surprise register on Rajk’s face as he saw the gun cradled against her chest. His fingers on her shoulder twitched. Rose jammed the barrel of the pistol against him, right over the heart, and pulled the trigger.

“For Tristan.”

Rajk smiled. “Well, bugger me,” he said.

And fell to the ground, black hole smoking from his chest.

Rose looked at the body, waiting for it to move, but Rajk’s sightless eyes only stared blankly up at the roof. Rose raised her eyes, and looked outside. Stratos was watching her, speaking furiously into something grey at her wrist.

Rose stumbled outside, onto the roof, pistol held in both hands before her like a dowsing rod, as though it was the one pulling her forwards, and she merely stumbling after.

Stratos lowered her wrist as Rose approached. “Miss Ozaki, so good of you to join me. Though I am curious. Why did you kill poor Rajk?” she asked stiffly.

“He shot Tristan.”

“Who?” Stratos frowned briefly. “Oh, the boy on the island. No. That was me.”

Rose stumbled. “You?”

In that instant, Stratos sprang forward across the gap between them, crashing into Rose, grappling for the gun. They landed on the ground, rolling, first Stratos on top, then Rose, then Stratos, snarling, trying to kick and knee one another.

Rose got one hand free and clawed at Stratos’s face, forcing the other woman to jerk her head back. Then screamed in agony as Stratos drove an elbow into her cheekbone. Her grip on the pistol went loose for a second.

A second was enough. Stratos wrested the gun free, and leaped to her feet, back against the balcony railing. “You’re dead,” the Rim Worlder woman hissed. “Your idiot boyfriend is dead, the drunken cripple is dead, that lovesick puppy is dead, the whole rotten, stinking, slimy lot of you, all dead. We’re going to win, and I’m going to Terra a hero, and there’s nothing you can do to stop me.”

Stratos raised the pistol and fired.

Rose rolled, too slow. The beam struck her shoulder, burning through, and she felt her arm go numb. But she was on her feet. And charged, head down, straight towards Stratos. Another beam sizzled over her head, singeing her scalp, burning her hair.

Rose’s shoulder impacted on Stratos’s stomach. The momentum carried them back, further back, smacking against the railing and then teetering, tipping, overbalanced, feet off the ground, over the edge of the railing, and out into empty space.

They fell, twisting and tumbling through the air, hands still at each other’s throats, before smacking hard into the plaza-lagoon below, kicking up a white fountain of water.

The waters churned and two heads surfaced, screaming, spluttering, grappling with one another. Producing movement, heat, and blood. The lagoon came alive, thousands upon thousands of lampreys and leeches stirring to sudden activity in a blood-fueled frenzy, falling upon the two thrashing figures, coiling and rolling around them, blind hook-toothed mouths questing, seeking, burrowing into exposed skin.

The waters bubbled, seethed, kicked up frothy waves that grew smaller and smaller as the two struggling figures grew weaker and weaker, before finally sinking down into the depths of the lagoon.

A few bubbles rose to the surface. Little hemispheres of nothing, that soon burst.
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #69 on: 31 July 2019, 19:36:09 »
+1 for Rose, but now I'm REALLY wondering about Curda...

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« Reply #70 on: 01 August 2019, 19:34:45 »
And here we go: The grand finale. Le final chapter, as they say in France.

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TWENTY-TWO: IMRE
Polar Tidal Flats, Near Fort Romas, Nusakan
Terran Hegemony (Star League)
December 29, 2766


The tanks churned the wet mud under their tracks, gouging long, unbroken arcs across the flats, all of them converging with the illusion of distance into a single point.

The whole tidal flat was crawling with tanks, like a swarm of woodlice, you know the ones, doodle bugs. The heavy Von Luckners formed a wedge in the lead, the top-heavy Manticores behind, a bunch of APCs packed with base security, MPs and other guys Shenk was pressing into service as infantry support bringing up the rear.

There was some other stuff, too. Big, rectangular crates with black-on-yellow warning labels.

I was perched on top of Shenk’s command tank, a little behind the lead tanks, my fingers locked around a handhold, trying to keep from being shaken off. They’d given me my pack back, my clothes, even my thermos (with the crystal, and this diary, hidden at the bottom).

Shenk was standing in the open cupola next to me, hand on his hips, top half of his face hidden behind a tanker’s helmet and smoky black goggles.

The man looked casual as you please, like he was going to a day at the beach.

He held the communicator, the one with the code: Deep Red. I wondered if it would work the way Orlova had promised (Had she known I would be caught? Had she arranged all this? No, that was too paranoid). Imagine the look on my face if we showed up at the back door, I said the magic words and nothing happened. They’d have shot me for sure, but then, that seemed the most likely outcome no matter what else happened.

Even if it worked, if the door magically opened, even if this somehow caught Orlova by surprise, there were still BattleMechs out there. The whole thing might be a trap: The BattleMechs might be waiting just on the other side of the door, ready to blast Shenk’s regiment all to hell. And me with them. An unarmored man clinging to the turret of a tank in the middle of a firefight with BattleMechs had about as much chance of surviving as a piece of tissue paper did in a furnace.

At least Rose would be okay. I’d made my peace with what she did, maybe even understood why she’d done it, even if I couldn’t quite forgive her for Hansen’s death. But at least one of us would make it out of this—with the Fort taken and me dead, Stratos and the rest would have no reason to hold her. She’d be free.

“Calorie bar?” Shenk held a kind of foil-wrapped grey-brown stick towards me. I said nothing. Shenk nodded, stuck it in his mouth and tore off a chunk. “No? Yeah, that’s probably wise,” he said around chews. “Tastes like three-day-old ass. Look, kid, don’t beat yourself up about this, you’re doing the right thing. It’s the smart move. The rest of the SLDF is five hundred light years away—the sooner Orlova surrenders, the less killing there’ll be, the less danger to the folks in the city, the better it’ll be all around.”

It was almost funny, how much Shenk and Orlova sounded the same. Saving lives, doing the right thing, what’s best for everyone. It’d be nice if I had all those grand things in my head. But I didn’t. Screw them all, Orlova, Stratos, Shenk, the whole damn planet full of them. Ames was dead, Hansen was dead and they’d turned Rose against me. So let them die, let them all die. This was my last, despairing middle finger to the system, the people, the so-called friends that had so thoroughly screwed me over. Let them all die.

We were approaching the mouth to the canyon that led to the Fort Romas gate. Not long now, I thought. Not long now. Orlova and the Fort were out there, waiting. The BattleMechs were out there, waiting.

“Tell your guys to bear left here, about fifteen degrees,” I said instead. Shenk just chewed thoughtfully at me, looking skeptically at what appeared to be a thin layer of water over the sand. “There’s a trench to the right,” I repeated. “The Deep Red trench. If you don’t want your lead platoon to sink, bear left.”

Shenk swallowed, and then nodded. “Whatever you say.” He chinned his helmet mike. “Mako One, bear left fifteen. All units, follow their lead.” He clicked off and looked at me. “Happy now?”

Everything flashed white.

I was blinded.

After-images in my eyes: Searing bands of light erupting from the water to our right, converging on the lead tank. So hot I thought the skin of my face must’ve been charred, wondered if my eyeballs had been cooked in their sockets. A detonation. The shockwave slapped me from the turret of Shenk’s Von Luckner. I landed wrong and all I could feel was a screaming, overwhelming pain shooting up my leg.

I found myself laying a couple of meters from Shenk’s tank. Titans were rising from the trench to our right, giants, great curtains of water sloshing from their shoulders, firing and firing as they rose. Burning, almost nuclear-hot laser and particle fire arcing over my head, screaming flights of missile salvos, streams of fiery tracer shells.

Orlova had sprung her trap, but not inside the Fort. Right here.

Tanks were burning everywhere. The lead tank had just dissolved, annihilated in the first salvo. Don’t know how long I was out, but when I lifted my head and tried to get my eyes to work again, already I could see another half-dozen smoking, blazing, wrecks.

The turret on Shenk’s Von Luckner turned, and the main gun fired. Recoil was enough to rock the 75-ton tank sideways, and it blew a haze of smoke and mud over my head, making me duck down again. I realized I’d barely heard a thing—the explosion of the first tank had deafened me—just had this hollow ringing in my ears. Like the sea in a shell.

Guess Shenk had made himself a target. A minor earthquake started pounding the ground, and when I rolled, I saw a fracking great 100-ton King Crab bearing right down on us. Fracking howitzers in each hand just firing and firing and firing and thumping into the side of the tank, blasting huge sheets of armor off the side of the Von Luckner, white-hot shrapnel spewing everywhere. I got wasp-stung by a few splinters across my back, arms, legs.

I tried to stand but almost passed out from the pain again. Leg would barely move. Tried to crawl. But the King Crab was charging, and suddenly it got dark and I looked up and saw its foot hanging right above me for a split-second, before it crashed down into the ground, just beyond, and damn if the thing didn’t just kick the Von Luckner in the side and flip it onto its side.

The BattleMech fired one more time, and blew a hole in the belly of the tank. There was a spurt of flame as something cooked off inside, and then the Von Luckner just dumped out a constant, massive pillar of black smoke.

Another Von Luckner nearby fired at the King Crab. Shots cratered into the ‘Mech’s side, cracked it, but couldn’t penetrate.

Someone staggered from Shenk’s tank, uniform smoking, and then a second later a flying splinter of armor from the King Crab sliced through their neck.

The King Crab focused on the new target and fired again, charging off further down the column, thunder steps receding with each second.

I wanted to cheer but the air was getting so hot from all the laser and particle fire, all the missiles and explosions and fires everywhere around me, I could barely take a breath without choking. Gagging, coughing, I crawled away, dragging my useless leg behind.

All I could do was crawl, like a worm in the mud, dragging myself towards the Deep Red trench. My lungs would be cinders in a few minutes. Maybe if I could get underwater, I thought, maybe.

Not like it would have made a difference. The tide would be coming in, and there was no way I was going to escape it without help.

I think I swam in and out of consciousness. Each time I looked up, the water seemed no closer. My hearing was coming back, I could faintly hear explosions and the crackle of weapons fire behind me, but that died away after a while. Felt like I’d been crawling for hours, maybe, for days. Couldn’t even raise my head any more, my horizon reduced to about a meter in front of me.

Then a pair of boots stepped in front of my face. I rolled onto my back, looked up, and saw Colonel Shenk looking down at me. His face was soot-smeared, gashes across forehead, cheek and chin, his uniform also torn and dirty. In his right hand, he held a pistol—Hansen’s. The same one I’d been handed weeks ago, or someone had been handed anyway. Didn’t feel much like me anymore—I barely recognized the guy I’d been back then.

Someone had given someone that gun, for some reason neither of them had really understood, triggering a cascade of events neither of them had controlled, to a conclusion neither had wanted. All the things that had seemed to matter at the time felt foolish now, as substantial as the mud under my back, as impermanent as the tide that would drown me in a matter of minutes.

Shenk crouched down by my head. He reached down, grabbed the front of my shirt, and with a grunt, hauled me up into a sitting position.

I could see the armored column now. The whole horizon was on fire, burning vehicles as far as the eye could see. Here and there, small ant-hills that were piles of bodies. A few shell-shocked survivors staggered among the wreckage, calling or looking for others, or simply wandering in a daze. Smoke from the fires combined into a single great sheet, billowing high into the sky, blotting out the clouds, the sun, the moons. Like it was the only thing left in the world. No sign at all of the BattleMechs. They’d gone, back to the Fort, leaving the survivors here, leaving me here. Leaving me here.

“The look on your face ... You didn’t know Orlova was going to do that, did you?” Shenk shook his head, laughing at himself, laughing at me, laughing at everything. “And this is how your loyalty is repaid. Looks like they’ve given you up for dead, my boy. Betrayed the betrayer. Oh, that almost makes this all worthwhile.”

“We stopped you,” I spat. “The tide’s coming, you know. You won’t make it in time.” Wanted to wipe that knowing grin from his face. But he only chuckled again.

“Ah, my boy. You still think any of this matters? You and Orlova haven’t stopped a damn thing. Today, tomorrow, next month, next year, the Fort is going to fall, Orlova is going to die, and then Kerensky is going to come back and burn whatever is still left standing to the ground.” Shenk made a helpless gesture with his empty hand. “As for me, the Krypteia doesn’t let failures live. I was dead the moment my regiment died.” Shenk tapped his heart. “Don’t let this semblance of life fool you, I’m already a goner. Delayed shock, maybe, dead man walking. Drowning’s a better end than I could have hoped for.”

I waited for Shenk to aim the gun, to blow my brains out, kill the traitor, but he just looked around the flat, looking left and right, past the burning, flaming hulks, the sodden heaps of bodies. Looking for something. He stood up.

“Which way is the tide going to come from?” Shenk asked me.

I pointed.

He squinted the way I’d pointed. Looked like he was about to go, when he reversed his grip on the pistol, and handed it to me, butt-first. “It’s loaded now. Hollow points. In case you want the easy way out,” he said to me. “Or want to give me one.” Then he started walking, back straight, arms swinging, straight towards the incoming tide.

He was smiling.

I held the gun for a moment. Black, sleek, remembering the day Hansen had handed it to me, all that time ago. Reliable, yeah, the one thing you can trust, the certainty of the grave. I didn’t have to think too hard. Pointed it at Shenk’s retreating back. Fully auto, one long pull of the trigger emptied the magazine. Gun kind of burped, bucked in my hand. I didn’t owe him anything, but still, it felt like this was the least I could do for him.

It will be coming in soon. Billions and billions of tons of water, all coming rushing across the flat, as merciless and unstoppable as history. No way I’m getting out of its way.

The waves are starting to come, higher each time. I’ve saved this diary onto the crystal, and I’ll put it in my empty thermos. If you’re reading this then, then ... ah, nevermind. Maybe I owed it to Ames and Hansen and Rose to tell this story, maybe I never owed anything to anyone. Maybe it’s all empty words and soap bubble feelings.

The tide’s coming in, across the galaxy, and it’ll go out again, and in between anything with substance or weight will sink to into the mud at the bottom and only the empty, ephemeral things will survive, by floating to the top.

Anyway, this is my message in a bottle. It’ll float. I won’t.

It’s hollow.

--THE END--
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #71 on: 01 August 2019, 20:03:16 »
Orlova "wins" after all... probably earning herself a nuke or three.  Still wondering about Curda, but nice ending there!  :thumbsup:

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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #72 on: 01 August 2019, 20:35:28 »
Orlova "wins" after all... probably earning herself a nuke or three.  Still wondering about Curda, but nice ending there!  :thumbsup:

The theme of the story is 'loyalty' and Curda's role in the story is that the only one to survive is the one that is loyal literally to death.

Shenk/Orlova -- Loyal to their respective militaries
Imre/Hansen -- Loyal to their friends
Stratos/Rose -- Loyal only to themselves
Curda -- Loyal to her religion (Ghede = voodoo spirits of death)
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #73 on: 01 August 2019, 20:57:20 »
Thanks for the explanation!  :thumbsup:

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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #74 on: 02 August 2019, 15:19:49 »
 :thumbsup:  Well done.. Sorry to see it end

Running an armored unit over tidal flats for an assault, that you either win or die..  WOW
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #75 on: 02 August 2019, 15:25:52 »
Well, when you know you'll be shot in the back of the head if you don't, it doesn't sound so crazy...  ::)

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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #76 on: 02 August 2019, 15:47:33 »
Well, when you know you'll be shot in the back of the head if you don't, it doesn't sound so crazy...  ::)
I get that, I'm just trying to explain to my Tankers why we are driving over what an tidal flat and how this is all going to end well.  Hover units at least can float/hover, but Von Luckner and nothing else sent can swim well.
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« Reply #77 on: 02 August 2019, 15:55:54 »
The tankers get the same explanation as the commander...  ^-^

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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #78 on: 02 August 2019, 16:03:35 »
That is one way to the end the story. cool and thanks for sharing.

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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #79 on: 02 August 2019, 19:24:08 »
And you say you don't do noir.  Pfft.

Excellent as always.  Thank you for sharing it with us.
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #80 on: 03 August 2019, 00:42:12 »
Hm, interesting reactions. Shenk's whole arc is about a basically decent man working for a shitty organization that's given him an impossible job. I tried to foreshadow that at the start: he's told to parade through a city with no streets. And an armored regiment really isn't what you need for a cavern assault ... and so on. I had him mention twice that him being in a tank would be a sign he'd totally lost control of the situation... and then in the last chapter he's in one of the lead tanks.

On a related subject it's interesting how some readers focus on the details of plot over themes or meaning. I thought the city name (Hubris) and the whole imagery of shifting, unpredictable tides might've been heavy handed but people seem to glide over that.
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #81 on: 03 August 2019, 03:45:36 »
wow, just..blimey. I wasn't expecting Strategos to go out like that, and the ending was very very well done, the conflict was at a personal level and there was the bits when the Mechs' come out to play and you captured how bloody terrifying that would be.

And whilst we know in the end, the Fort, and in truth, the world itself are just tiny little peices on a massive table, you made them utterly important and the whole focus of the story.

Damn fine writing!
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Re: Hollow Point - The Amaris Coup
« Reply #82 on: 03 August 2019, 09:55:34 »
 :(  Oh I been laughing about the tank force everytime they deployed, because someone sent the wrong force here.
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