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BARNESGN

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Fightin 16th 3048
« on: 02 February 2011, 17:18:14 »
Tell me what you think and enjoy.
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gkuenneke

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Re: Fightin 16th 3048
« Reply #1 on: 07 February 2011, 09:57:24 »
An interesting start! Only one suggestion, please review and edit your work prior to submitting. There were a couple of sentences that broke the flow of the story.
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BARNESGN

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Re: Fightin 16th 3048
« Reply #2 on: 09 February 2011, 16:08:49 »
Sad to say I have no one to edit or check my fiction. Except this board.
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gkuenneke

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Re: Fightin 16th 3048
« Reply #3 on: 11 February 2011, 12:58:26 »
Understand all! Still interesting read.
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