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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #30 on: 14 March 2012, 08:27:37 »
first and second PDF release, page 19, sidebar, last sentence in "department of Revenue"

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...its personal provided half the First Lord’s security detail.

Replace personal with personnel.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #31 on: 14 March 2012, 08:29:28 »
first and second PDF releases, page 27, left column, third paragraph:

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Though they did not know it was already too late, troops of the Cameron’s personal regiment, the Royal Black Watch began to...

The regiment's name is a parenthetical statement, and so needs a comma after it.

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Though they did not know it was already too late, troops of the Cameron’s personal regiment, the Royal Black Watch, began to...

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #32 on: 14 March 2012, 08:32:02 »
First and second PDF releases, Page 33, last sentence under General Lee's bio:

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exhausted by over two-decades of continuous war

The dash isn't needed.

Suggested fix is to remove it as below.

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exhausted by over two decades of continuous war

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #33 on: 14 March 2012, 08:33:41 »
first and second pdf release, page 34 left column, first paragraph, first sentence:

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...comprised over four-thousand line regiments, of which...

Again, dash isn't needed in four thousand.

Suggested fix is to remove dash.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #34 on: 14 March 2012, 08:36:33 »
Both PDF releases, page 42, first paragraph, second sentence (third line in PDF)

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...the principal of guile...

Incorrect word. Principal is an American public school headmaster or the main part of an organization or financial loan. Principle is what deals with morals, ideas, etc.

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...the principle of guile...

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #35 on: 14 March 2012, 08:39:34 »
Both PDF releases, page 42, Third Army description.

Referred to as a "Standard Defensive army." Standard Defensive is only capitalized under the Third Army description. It doesn't match the other army descriptions where Standard Defensive is lowercase. Particularly noticeable in the Second Army description directly above Third Army description.

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Make capitalization of standard army consistent in army descriptions. Easiest solution is probably to make Third Army "Standard Defensive" lowercase.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #36 on: 14 March 2012, 08:41:44 »
Both PDF releases, page 54, "The Terror" section, third paragraph, first sentence:

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Amaris applied the same principals to...

Again, this is the wrong word.

Suggested fix is to replace with "principles":

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Amaris applied the same principles to...

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #37 on: 14 March 2012, 08:45:50 »
both PDF releases, page 62, first paragraph, second sentence:

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...in the tragedy shown remorse.

Should there be an "and" between tragedy and shown? Maybe or?

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...in the tragedy and shown remorse.
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...in the tragedy or shown remorse.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #38 on: 14 March 2012, 08:47:44 »
Both PDFs, page 66, Beatrice Avellar

Dates of her presidency are oddly formatted. Appears to have an extra year in the range.

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Rank/Position: President of the Outworlds Alliance (served
(2706)2709-2765)

Suggested fix: Remove 2706) from range.

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Rank/Position: President of the Outworlds Alliance (served
(2709-2765)

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #39 on: 14 March 2012, 10:17:19 »
PDF page 35 in the "A Difference of Philosophy" Sidebar.

"The design philosophies of modern WarShips and
those of the modern era differ markedly."

I think it was meant to say "Star League" or "Star League era"
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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #40 on: 14 March 2012, 13:17:09 »
Both PDFs, page 66, Beatrice Avellar

Dates of her presidency are oddly formatted. Appears to have an extra year in the range.

Suggested fix: Remove 2706) from range.

That's not an error. As indicated in the text, Beatrice had a regent for the first few years of her reign until she came of age in 2709. The same style is used to indicate the regency during the first 11 years of Richard Cameron's reign (see p56).

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #41 on: 16 March 2012, 12:34:26 »
Page 49, 1st paragraph:

"Composition: Circa 750 destroyers and cruisers..."

The word "circa" indicates a time frame, not a quantity.

Replace "circa" with "approximately". 

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #42 on: 22 March 2012, 21:39:06 »
Page 11, PDF:

Hope IV (Later named Randis IV) is not shown in the map. According to Interstellar Players 2, page 42 that "...it was originally charted as Hope in the late 27th century...", that would put it in the 2600s so it should be visible in 2765 map.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #43 on: 02 April 2012, 20:46:56 »
PDF, Second release, pages 177 & 178

The Right and Left Broadsides for the M5/M5C show 2 AR-10 launchers with 20 KB and 40 B.

Replace KB with KW (for Killer Whale).

Two other errors on the M5/M5C record sheet:

1. Both the FR/FL and AR/AL NAC-20 bays list damage values for extreme range, even though NAC-20s can only engage up to long range.

2. The listing for the Aft Barracuda bay is incorrect.  The bay contains 2 Barracuda launchers (each one doing 2 points of Capital Scale damage) and thus should have a Capital Scale damage value of 4, not 2.

DEVELOPER: Correct, good catch.
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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #44 on: 03 April 2012, 23:23:02 »
PDF, page 45

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NINETEENTH ARMY
Composition: 3 Corps (XLIII, XLVIII,
LXXII

These are not the corps that can be found in the SL sourcebook, there the 19th Army uses 46th, 56th and 65th corps.

I suggest changing it to XLVI, LVI, LXV.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #45 on: 04 April 2012, 23:25:41 »
PDF, page 45

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TWENTIETH ARMY
Composition: 3 Corps (XLVII, LIX,
LXVII – 7 BattleMech divisions,
15 infantry divisions, 30
independent regiments)

15 is wrong, was already wrong when stated in the original SL sourcebook because this will lead to more infantry divisions than the historical 50 that were deployed and adding another ID would throw the numbers for IDs participating in the Periphery uprising and/or the Terran Campaign more off than they already are(OK would help with the missing ID in the Exodus).
So confirming one number from the old SL sourcebook but at the same time making a lot other numbers wrong seems to be a doubtful way, sticking to 14 makes at least not more damage than there already is.

I suggest changing it to 14 infantry divisions.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #46 on: 10 May 2012, 08:28:49 »
Page 97, Troops involved in the Outworlds uprising sidebar.

In the Total number of OA/Rebels troops, it reads:

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172 of MAF/Secret Army

Change MAF to AMC to represent the correct military.


page 168, M-5 Caspar drone fluff, column 2, paragraph 4

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While this affected the command drones accuracy
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Should be corrected to drone's


Page 176 (or so), M-5C Caspar Drone record sheet

The Notes section does not mention the Autonomous Tactical Analysis Computer listed in the fluff for the design on page 168
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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #47 on: 25 November 2012, 19:48:11 »
printed page 159.

The base gunnery / piloting skills for Dropship Drones in the SDS Drone Control System Equipment Table are listed as 5 / 6, improvable to 4 / 5 which would then be the maximum for drone dropships.

However the M3 dropship drone on page 170 is listed with gunnery 3 & piloting 4 and those values are on the record sheet as well.

Should the base skill levels be 4 / 5 ( as they are on the WoB Caspar II) instead?

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #48 on: 14 July 2013, 10:33:18 »
Hardcopy
Page 66
Nicoletta Calderon's birthdate is given as 2707 and her reign as Protector is from 2725 to 2801

Per Era Report 2750 (hardcopy page 94) she was born in 2708 and ruled from 2726 to 2801.  This matches the info in periphery 1e that she became protector in 2726 at age 18. 

Correction:
Change her birthdate to Jan 4, 2708 and her rule from 2726 to 2801

Hardcopy pg 66
Nicoletta came to power at a young age following the retirement of her grandfather and murder of her UNCLE

from Era report 2750 (hardcopy page 94)
The assassination of Hampton Calderon came as a shock to the entire Concordat in 2726, but none more so than his DAUGHTER Nicoletta.

Hampton Calderon can't be both her Father and her Uncle. 

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #49 on: 23 September 2013, 00:36:02 »
PDF - Pg 176

Voidseeker Drones (Both -004 and -007).
S-ASRCS Tonnage
Both drones have 3 and 4 Tons respectively on Improved S-ASRCS. Accounting for 5% of their tonnage (Respectively, 60 and 75 tons). Per rules on Page 156 to 157 (Of same book), Improved S-ASRCS require 6% of ASF tonnage.

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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #50 on: 15 July 2015, 01:53:13 »
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Page 35, Attached Aerospace section, last sentence "These units did not possess the same additional transport and engineer support as did their GAW and IAW sister formations, and were consequently forced to reply either upon other co-deployed units or local populations to provide those services."

Suggest replacing the last sentence with:

"These units did not possess the same additional transport and engineer support as did their GAW and IAW sister formations, and were consequently forced to rely either upon other co-deployed units or local populations to provide those services."

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Page 140, Inside, Looking Out section, 1st paragraph "The Roman Empire had a “bread and circuses” policy to keep the population pliant—basically, keep them entertained a bribed —and Amaris instigated his own version to win over the people of the Hegemony."

Suggest replacing sentence with:

"The Roman Empire had a “bread and circuses” policy to keep the population pliant—basically, keep them entertained and bribed —and Amaris instigated his own version to win over the people of the Hegemony."
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Re: Historical: Liberation of Terra, Vol I
« Reply #51 on: 07 March 2016, 09:09:08 »
PDF Edition (although I'll check the hard copy when I get home), page 104.

Problem: the Killbourn system, which should be located within the region bordered by Yorii, New Earth and Rigil Kentarus, is missing from the map. It's present on other maps in Historical: Liberation of Terra Volumes 1 and 2 - it just seems to be this map that it's missing from. Kilbourn is also missing from a similar map dated 2750 on page 25 of Handbook: Major Periphery States, but is present on the map dated 2750 on page 37 of Era Report: 2750, so it appears to be something of an elusive system.

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