I got an email Wednesday when I was deep into it that there was an updated version, what changed, precisely? I really enjoyed it, by and large. These are the Falcons I can come the closest to getting behind. But I did notice some things that could have been typos that were kind of immersion breaking, where I'd have to stop and reread a paragraph or page trying to parse it. Wasn't sure if I was just missing something, but that may be what was changed.
One thing that surely wasn't a typo was Jiyi calling Malthus a fascist in their final duel. That struck me as very strange. I mean, the Clans as a whole aren't much for pre-Star League history, but even assuming Jiyi is an erudite and well-read clanner (entirely likely), fascist just seems like a weird and irrelevant term of abuse for him to use. I mean, the clans all have some fascist elements, but that's not really what makes the Mongols stand out from Jiyi's Falcons. It *did* immediately put me in mind of the "Everyone I don't like is Hitler" meme, but...a clan Khan seeming to reference a 21st century meme is why it broke immersion for me.