So, I finally started re-reading these for laughs yesterday, just finished the first volume. A couple of things stood out:
1) No handstands yet, but there are multiple incidents of mechs either getting hit by weapons or physical attacks and getting 'knocked over' into a roll back onto their feet immediately, like you would expect in a physical fight scene between humans.
2) In one instance, a Hatchetman hits its jump jets, and as it jumps over an IndustrialMech, it
kicks it in the head and literally nothing happens. The IndustrialMech literally just turns around and shoots the Hatchetman.
3) Anastasia Kerensky is just plain bat-s*** crazy, like 1 notch below Malvina level crazy. She's randomly stabbing people, fantasizing about destroying cities, etc. Nothing like what we see in the more recent novels. As near as I can remember, she tortures Alaric Ward in a later novel, and apparently that magically cures her of her sociopathic tendencies????? IDK, just weird.
4) Ezekiel Crow defeats Anastasia Kerensky by.....shooting a laser into the sky above her mech during a thunderstorm, causing lightning to strike her mech and disable it. WHAT? This is even worse than Joanna's jump jet to the face while Natasha Kerensky stands there and lets her face get melted off. I'm pretty sure that the author just painted himself into a corner with his choice of Mechs. Tara Campbell pilots a Hatchetman, Kerensky pilots a Ryuken II, and Ezekiel Crow pilots a Blade. He wanted Crow to defeat Kerensky in single combat, yet he had a Blade facing a Ryoken II. There is virtually no way that you can write this duel and have Crow defeat Kerensky in an actual BattleTech fight. He is in a mech 40 tons lighter, his most powerful weapons do 5 points of damage, and he is facing one of the best BattleMech pilots of the era. In addition, Kerensky's Ryoken II is a custom variant sporting 2xER PPCs, 2x Medium lasers, and 2xStreak SRM-6 racks. Crow has a SLIGHT edge in speed, but lacks jump jets. Kerensky can splatter away with her Streaks and down him in no time, and 1 or 2 lucky PPC hits at minimum is going to tear his little tin can apart. The ONLY way Crow is going to win is with some kind of cheesy maneuver, and sure enough, that's what we get, calling down lightning bolts with a medium laser.
5) I don't know if this is unique to the Kindle edition, but starting about half way through the novel, each chapter contains MULTIPLE POV changes with absolutely nothing signaling the change. You will have Anastasia Kerensky talking and piloting her mech in one sentence, then the next paragraph will literally be Crow talking or the infantry characters fighting in a trench somewhere. No extra spacing, no little symbol to indicate a break, nothing. You get something like:
Anastasia fired her PPC's. "I have you now, freebirth!"
Tara Campbell called out over the command frequency. "Find me Paladin Crow immediately! I need him to report to me in grid one-two-three-four-five!"
Will checked the power pack for his thunderstroke Gauss rifle.
Damn! I'm down to my last charge!It is horribly distracting, especially in the middle of a disjointed battle.
6) That's not to say that everything was badly written. In particular, the parts where the scouts are watching the mountain pass and the Steel Wolf armor is trying to pass through was pretty well done. You have a decent portrayal of the fog of war so you don't just have the Wolves pouring through unchecked.
7) Of course, this good part is followed up by the absolutely horrible delaying battle. We have tanks and infantry and elementals against a ragamuffin band of infantry, a few tanks, and a Koshi. And Somehow, the Koshi runs up and down the line, singlehandedly turning the Wolves back for HOURS. That's right, ONE KOSHI! Also annoying is that we don't ACTUALLY know what kind of Koshi it is. It seems like it's the BattleMech version instead of the Omni version, but that's just conjecture. And then, after hours of holding the Wolves off, the Wolf commander is like "Hey, I think that Koshi is their leader, shoot him" and like 30 seconds later they just shoot him and, wham, Koshi down. Really, it took you like 8+ HOURS to figure that out?
8) The majority of the combat doesn't seem like BattleTech combat, it seems more like some Napoleonic war fight. You have two static lines with the leaders riding up and down them. Most advances are basically one leader or the other saying "Hey, see that hill over there, fire some LRM's at it" followed by "Look, their line is breaking, attack that hill!"
Left me thinking of one of the many cheesy lines from the movie Gettysburg:
https://youtu.be/SWABH9kzMlk